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14 May 2007 @ 07:58 pm
Original Fiction "A Day Like Any Other Day"  
Hi everyone.

So I got this plot bunny from my six year old who came running out of her room this morning and told me there were ghosts in her room.

She's been playing this game for about a week now but this morning it finally hit me.

So here's a little piece of original fiction from me.

I know it's not BJ but you might want to read it if this is your thing.

Thanks!!!

Title: A Day Like Any Other Day
Genre: Supernatural/Horror
POV: First Person

Summary: What if there really were a handful of people who could see and talk to the dead? What would their day be like?






I hate the sunny days.

We live in Washington fucking state.

It should rain every day. But it's been sunny every single day for the past two weeks.

That's late summer for you.

I get up and locate some clothes. Perfect! My super baggy overalls, the kind that can fit two and a half of me in there, and a tiny t-shirt should do the trick.

Rushing out of the house, I ignore the thing sitting at the table.

I can talk to him later. I know what he wants. It's what they all want.

Closure.

Well, its closure might have something to do with me this time.

I hightail it onto the road and start walking. The Falls are always nice this time of the morning. As I walk along the road, birds cheerily chirping everywhere, I notice the thing is back, the one that had been at the kitchen table.

"Don't follow me."

"You have to talk to me," it says.

"Whatever," I shoot back, not looking at it.

The thing stops in the middle of the street.

"I'll still be here when you get back!" it screams.

Oh don't I know.

"You're much too cynical for someone your age," it screams at me.

Tell me about it.

The story of my life.

Well, what I've lived of it. If you call that living, that is.

The day is getting hotter as I walk along the road. It's also getting more crowded as all the cars pass alongside of me. Cars filled with tourists, going off to do their touristy-type things.

They're also working on the road.

Again.

As I pass the crewmen, some of them wave to me. I wave back.

I see one of them who doesn't belong. His clothes are dirty, and his face looks like its seen too much.

It probably has.

Pneumatic power drill accidents are not pretty things.

I try to pass by it quickly but it continues to wave at me. I must make my escape.

It doesn't work as he approaches me.

"Please, I need to tell my wife something. Could you get a message to her?" it asks me.

"Sure, okay," I say.

After the thing tells me what his beloved needs to know, I really do make my escape.

I should charge rates.

After I leave the road crew behind, I decide it would be better to just hitch the rest of the way to the Falls. All these tourists with their happy families?

I should get picked up by someone in no time. Or one of the locals who know me.

As I stick my thumb out, a car stops immediately. A nice Lexus. One of those pretty greens. The guy rolls down the window and looks at me. "Where you going?"

"The Falls," I shrug.

"Hop in," he smiles.

He seems like a nice guy.

I sit in front with him.

After all, the backseat has that thing in it.

"You shouldn't take rides from strangers," it says.

"Yeah, don't I know it."

"Look what he did to me. Raped me and left me for dead in the middle of the woods," it says.

"Sucks to be you," I sneer.

I think I've perfected the sneer over the years.

"Um...who are you talking to?" the guy says, laughing nervously while he says it.

"The lady in back you killed and left for dead in the woods a year ago. Did I get that right?" I ask as I turn around in my seat.

The guy turns a few shades of pale. Not dead-pale. I know what that color looks like.

"The dead don't lie," I say as I look at him straight in the face.

I like to sound ominous sometimes. They take me more seriously.

"How did you?" he stutters out.

God, this guy might actually wet his pants.

"Like I care. You think I'm gonna run to the police? Like they'd believe me. Just," and I love this part as I lean over, "I know and you know. Oh and it knows too," I say as I point to the back.

He stops the car pretty quick and pushes me out. Of course, it's a terribly curvy road and I guess he was pretty spooked cause the next thing I know, he crashes into one of the big evergreens on the side of the road.

"Great. Now he's dead and he'll want something from me too," I say to the thing on the side of the road who also vacated the car with me.

"Can you get a message to my parents? Let them know where I am in the woods. Where my remains are," it says.

"Yeah sure. I charge by the hour though," I laugh.

"You're very sardonic for someone as young as you," it says.

"Fuck, do you guys get together or what?" I shoot out.

I'll get the message to her parents. I always do.

It's a crapshoot whether they'll believe me or not though.

I look over at the tree the guy just crashed into. The guy never comes out of the car.

Maybe he'll make it.

I walk on and come to the Falls finally. If you go down the back path, the one that goes through the power plant, you can come right out to the bottom of the falls, where the river meets the cascading water.

It's very quiet here and no one bothers me.

I hear someone clear their throat.

Well, almost.

I forgot about the accident last week after every Tom, Dick and Harry came out from Seattle to ride down the river.

"Hey," the thing said.

Fuck, the cooler was still strapped to its leg.

"I was dragged under," it continued.

"I know, you idiot. You had the cooler strapped to your ankle and the undertow took you...welll..under. Didn't your mommy ever tell you about how not to strap anchors to yourself when in the water?" I mock.

"I was kinda tanked at the time," it says.

"So I figured. You could be the poster child for why you shouldn't drink and go down a raging river at the same time. Too bad you're dead though. What do you want?"

"Do you mock everyone you meet?" it asks. It almost sounds hurt.

"Only the dead ones."

"It's about my girlfriend," it says.

Here we go again.

I really need to charge rates.

It's finally time for me to go home and this time one of the locals picks me up.

A live one, thankfully.

"Did you hear about the guy that drove into the tree?" Danny asks me.

"Yeah, he must've been spooked by a deer or something," I shrug.

"Go figure. He's still alive though. He confessed to killing that girl who disappeared a year ago. Told them where to find the body and everything," Danny says jumping up in his seat.

"Yeah?"

Well, that saves me a trip.

I walk into the house and see the thing at the table again. "Hi Grandpa."

"I'm worried about you," it says.

"Worried about me?" I have to laugh as I drink straight from the carton. "You're the one who's dead. Died fishing on the river."

"Don't drink from the carton," it says.

"Why? I'm gonna give everyone my cooties?" I say.

"You're much too cynical for someone so young," it says, for the hundredth time this month.

"Yeah, yeah I know," I say as I pull out an apple.

"Who were you talking to baby?" my mom says as she walks in.

"Hi mom, just myself, you know..."

"Did you hear the news?"

"News? What news?" I ask. Somehow, I have a bad feeling about this. It's confirmed though when I look out at the porch.

"Big plane crash out at SeaTac," she says as she starts to prepare dinner.

Big brother decides to come in at that moment and start to taunt me. "They say at least one-hundred-fifteen are dead," he whispers into my ear.

"Really?" I look out the window and on our porch.

I count one-hundred-twelve.

I can see the looks on all their faces. They want something. They always want something. Whether it's to confess who their killer is or who they killed, where the secret stash of cash was, or just one more 'I love you.'

They always wanted something.

I stare out at all the faces of the people on my porch, all pushing into one another.

My day just got a little bit weirder.

I should make them take a number.

"Life's a bitch and then you crash in a plane, ya know?" I say.

"Oh honey," my mom says as she shakes her head. "Grandpa always said you were much too cynical for someone your age."

Yeah, and he still does.

Maybe he's right.

Afterall, I'm only eight.



The End


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singlewomansinglewoman on May 15th, 2007 03:15 am (UTC)
Very good, different. A hint of Sixth Sense and The Others mixed with Stephen King.

Yep, you gotta write the murder mystery!
Maria: TCM Death Lives Hereslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 03:25 am (UTC)
I just ran with it. I couldn't use 'too big words' either. :P

A murder mystery would be fun though. Hey! Thanks!

*hugs you*
Jude: by backlitflashfly on May 15th, 2007 03:31 am (UTC)
I almost didn't read this, and now I'm glad I did. I want to know what happened between the eight year old and her grandfather.
Maria: TCM Death Lives Hereslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 03:40 am (UTC)
Yeah, well, I could leave that one to your imagination but it's not really anything sinister.

He's just worried about her. An eight year old who's that cynical? His closure won't come till he knows she'll be alright.

Thanks for reading!!!!
Jude: haunted houseflashfly on May 15th, 2007 04:56 am (UTC)
His closure won't come till he knows she'll be alright.

Ah. Thanks.
Skywalker's Dreamskywalkersdream on May 15th, 2007 03:32 am (UTC)
Only eight??? Ok I could handle the whole story, but I was picturing a teen. But eight??? Wow that one I didnt see coming. Great story.
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 03:41 am (UTC)
Thank you!

You know me and the twists at the end. :P

You would expect a teen - that's the way they act naturlly.

But someone who's had to live with what she lives with on her shoulders wouldn't be like most kids.
fluffys_girl: Rin stay with mefluffys_girl on May 15th, 2007 04:01 am (UTC)
My god, mom! I never knew my sister could inspire such cynical and "interesting" horror stories out of you. If you could call it a horror story. It is more like a humor story gone wrong... Good to know you added the story of the guy who tied a cooler to his leg while going down the Raging River and died a while ago. But are you sure you haven't watched "Sixth Sense" in a while?
Maria: Bad Mommyslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 05:58 am (UTC)
Yep, even Rowan can provide plot bunnies! Humor Story Gone Wrong? Well, okay. :)

And hey! I had to add in Cooler-Boy! Got that whole part of the river shut down until the undertow went away! And that was only last year, if you rememeber correctly.

And no, I haven't watched The Sixth Sense in a long long time but I can still rememeber the concept. Your mom hasn't totally lost her memory.

Really Alex...I mean Rowan...um Megan...
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Maria: Frodo doesn't live here anymoreslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 05:55 am (UTC)
LOL! Well, tomorrow is Tuesday, so I guess I could spare it.

Let me just sever the brain stem right there....

jbdfbjdujdidkdjdjed
mickxfanmickxfan on May 15th, 2007 04:33 am (UTC)
As I was reading, The Sixth Sense scenes ran through my head. Wonder how it's like to see ghosts?
Maria: TCM Death Lives Hereslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 05:52 am (UTC)
I should ask Rowan. She was the one who keeps telling me they're ghosts in the house! LOL!

Yeah, The Sixth Sense came to mind and Stir of Echoes. I loved the concept but I seriously wondered, what would a person who did talk to the dead, what would their day be like. Really?

Thanks for reading!!!
mosieandbeanmosieandbean on May 15th, 2007 04:55 am (UTC)
what a pain in the patootie those dead people are. it's all me, me, me, but maybe i'm too cynical. you know how much i love you. you NEED to do more original writing.
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 05:50 am (UTC)
I agree. It's always me, me, me, gimme, gimme.

They're dead! They need to stop being so demanding.

Hey! If I continued on with this, I could call it The Demanding Dead!

I do need to do more original writing - you're right! Thank you!!!!
critic75critic75 on May 15th, 2007 05:28 am (UTC)
It felt like a first chapter. If it was, I would have stayed up all night reading it. It was that good.

Oh, it just now occurred to me. It was a PG13, and only missed the G rating because of the dead bodies.
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 05:48 am (UTC)
I could write a whole series around this little girl. I swear.

But it was a one-off. Maybe I'll come back to her someday.

Yeah, the dead bodies (esp Pneumatic Drill guy) and her language at the beginning might have pushed it to a PG-13.

Very NOT Disney.

Thank you. (I had a feeling you'd like it.) :)
Lisabrianswalk on May 15th, 2007 10:58 am (UTC)
As I was reading the Cooler-boy part, I had a feeling that was real. I got the impression the girl was much older, poor kid.

This was really good, I'd definitely read more!
Maria: TCM Death Lives Hereslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 10:00 pm (UTC)
I was giving the impression that she was because having that kind of power would age a person quickly, IMO.

And yeah, Cooler-Boy was real. Funny you should call him that. That was the nickname he acquired last year. Actually, we sold him his last cheeseburger. Every year it happens though, all the people come out from Seattle at the start of the summer and they don't understand the nature of the river. Then they go out on their innertubes with their beer and well, you know.

Thank you! I'm so glad you gave this a try. I might actually write more. I like her too much to let go. :)
Lisabrianswalk on May 15th, 2007 10:29 pm (UTC)
Actually, we sold him his last cheeseburger.

How auspicious! ;)
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Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 09:56 pm (UTC)
Yeah, they always show these kids as being super shy but I think if the kid was tough skinned, they would be just like this.

Thank you for reading and commenting!
Bluemchenkaffee: 308 j flirtybluemchenkaffee on May 15th, 2007 07:42 pm (UTC)
Wow - an original story from you!
I loved it and I want to read more. Maybe you could write a sequel? Please?!?

"Look what he did to me. Raped me and left me for dead in the middle of the woods," it says.

"Sucks to be you," I sneer.

I think I've perfected the sneer over the years.


Just great!!

Susanne
Maria: TCM Death Lives Hereslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 09:55 pm (UTC)
I was thinking about writing more on the adventures of this little girl too. Whenever I create a character that i really love (and my readers love), I don't want to put them away just yet.

Thank you Susanne!
qafmaniac: Brian WTFqafmaniac on May 15th, 2007 08:33 pm (UTC)
When I first saw this I thought:There is no B/J so don't read it.Besides..you do not have the time right now to read 'cause your laundry is waiting!!
Than I thought:Fuck the laundry...it's from Maria!Read it!
And I have to say I'm really glad I did it because otherwise I would have missed a really interesting and fascinating story!

You did good,girl!!!


Tita
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 09:53 pm (UTC)
The nice thing about laundry? It'll always be there. ;P

I'm glad you read too! Thanks Tita!!!!

Now...go do the laundry!
harka: nosferatu3 by brokeniconharka on May 15th, 2007 08:44 pm (UTC)
Summary: What if there really were a handful of people who could see and talk to the dead? What would their day be like?

A half an hour ago I asked Jane has she ever seen The Others. Now, I'm asking you have you ever seen it. IMO, it's a fucking brilliant film - from the direction to the performance.

I'll read your non-BJ story tomorrow. I can hardly wait. I love such stories (read "your stories").
Maria: Night of the Living Deadslave_o_spike on May 15th, 2007 09:52 pm (UTC)
I've seen The Others. It was brilliant! It didn't click until about three quarters through that they were the ones dead. Whoa!

Way before this movie and The Sixth Sense and Siesta, I wrote a fic where the person went through the whole story not knowing they were dead.

*blushes* Thank you for the vote of confidence.
Chaos..panic..disorder...my work here is done.: incestuous fag heathensjillapet on May 15th, 2007 10:54 pm (UTC)
DUDE. That gave me freaking goosebumps.
Maria: TCM Death Lives Hereslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 03:13 am (UTC)
Goosebumps huh? Then my job is done. :)

Thanks Pet!
Chaos..panic..disorder...my work here is done.: Seriously?jillapet on May 15th, 2007 10:54 pm (UTC)
OMFGSQUEEE-you HAVE to do this for your next B/J serious fic. Seriously.
Maria: B/J cha cha chaslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 03:12 am (UTC)
Now - do you mean the guys come into contact with her or adopt her or Justin is her only a him and is 8?

LOL!
Chaos..panic..disorder...my work here is done.jillapet on May 16th, 2007 03:28 am (UTC)
How 'bout Justin IS her about 10 years in the future, and besides being cynical, is a bit of the Batshit Insane due to ghosts wandering around him all his life. Of course, Brian comign into his life doesn't make it any more stable.

Think of his interactions with Jack Kinney once he finds out what he did to Brian!
Maria: Frodo doesn't live here anymoreslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 03:31 am (UTC)
Oh God. Batshit!insane!Justin talking to Jack. LOL!

You know, this story would probably do really well on MW. LOL!
Warning: Proximity to me causes adventures.karnythia on May 15th, 2007 11:58 pm (UTC)
Wow, I like this a lot.
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 03:11 am (UTC)
Thank you!!! :)
sevigny7sevigny7 on May 16th, 2007 12:56 am (UTC)
I can't believe I read this. I read in all genres...except Horror. First, Cannibal!fic and now you've lured me in again!

It was really compelling, Maria, and I could probably be induced, after weeks of dithering of course, to read a sequel.

Suzanne
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 03:09 am (UTC)
You never read horror? Wow! I've converted you!

I am definitely thinking sequel here. Thank you so much Suzanne! *hugs you*
Sometimes it is otherwise: Dark Waterviolethamster on May 16th, 2007 02:32 am (UTC)
I enjoyed this so much. Poor little girl, but I like her attitude.
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 03:01 am (UTC)
Thank you!!! I know - I think she's my most tragic character to date but the only way she could survive this is with a thick skinned attitude.
Doriantdorian on May 16th, 2007 08:34 am (UTC)
"The end"...? why is that ? Sounds like a beginning to me...eh eh.Aida
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 16th, 2007 11:10 pm (UTC)
I might turn this into a series called The Demanding Dead. LOL! Thanks!
firehead30: Bellefirehead30 on May 17th, 2007 01:11 am (UTC)
Maria.....more
So, Maria, is this chapter one? I want to know what else, why, how, and what!

Grabbed me right away and I didn't know what to feel for the girl at first. Her age threw me, but could understand how a little girl would become so weary.

What are you going to do next?
Maria: TCM The Road to Hellslave_o_spike on May 17th, 2007 05:19 am (UTC)
Re: Maria.....more
I'm thinking of expanding on it. I really like her. When I create an OC I like, I just want to run with it. Like Joe or Phil.

Grabbed you right away? Then I did my job. :)

Thank you Fire! *smooches*
adelais_liliadelais_lili on May 23rd, 2007 07:42 am (UTC)
This is really good. I love those kind of stories. And the main character is only eight years old and already cynical as hell. At least the kid knows that there is something beyond. As if she cares. Thanks for sharing this story. Hugs.
Maria: MOM hack horror writerslave_o_spike on May 24th, 2007 12:55 am (UTC)
Exactly! As if she cares. :P

I had to put myself in her place and this is what I thought she would be like.

Thank you so much. I love how many of my flist read my little original fic and loved it!
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Maria: Spuffy filmslave_o_spike on June 16th, 2007 02:15 pm (UTC)
Not only is it right up your alley, but mine as well. This is the kind of thing I usuallly write. I've just adapted to the fandom for Brian and Justin (I can't help it, those two just speak to me).

Thank you for that. I was going for 'creeepy.' I'm thinking of expanding this and putting it into book form.
elfladyjeanne: tree of lifeelfladyjeanne on January 18th, 2010 05:58 pm (UTC)
This little girl would make a killer Vegas act. Liked a lot!! Thanks for sharing.
Maria: blinking owlslave_o_spike on January 25th, 2010 04:29 am (UTC)
She would, wouldn't she? Personally, I would love to see her go on the John Edwards Show and show him how it was done. No 'I sense someone with a J in their name,' for her. It would be more like, 'You're Mark, right? Your mom, Gladys, who died while eating mashed potatoes and watching Oprah, says hi and for you to stop watching so much beastiality porn.'

Thank you for the fb. :)