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17 April 2006 @ 07:56 pm
My daughter's a Mary Sue!  
My 14-year-old daughter, Megan, just handed me the story she's been working on. She's into Xanith.

Oh God! She's writing a Mary Sue and none of the name's have been changed to protect the innocent (namely her erstwhile family).

So she has all (and I mean ALL) of the family here with her. And she has us somehow entering the world of Xanith and she knows everything blah blah blah and she's perfect blah blah blah and I become the "woman who holds the baby most of the time" blah blah blah and my oldest daughter, Alex, and their aunt, Mallory (my 18-year-old sister-in-law who lives with us now) become the harpies blah blah blah. Oh God!!!

She gave me the first 3 chapters to read and I had to start banging my head on the tabletop to get through it. Now mind you, her grammar is impeccable, and her story-telling is pretty good (it had become a bit boring in some places but then, that's how quite a few of these fantasy stories read). I will give her kudos for that. It's just....that it's....so Mary Sue, ya know?!

Should I encourage her? Should I continue to bang my head against the table and hope it doesn't cause permanent brain damage?

So if you read my little rant, let me know any advice you have. All advice and feedback is welcome even if it's to say, "too late on the whole brain damage thing."

Oohh! Ooh! We are now officially part of the 21st Century. We just got our credit card machine at our restaurant and can now takes cards so Yay for us!
azure_k_mello: cuddles-by meazure_k_mello on April 18th, 2006 06:52 pm (UTC)
I think you should encourage her because it's great that she's writing. But don't let her put it on the internet because she will be shredded.
Maria: mad about youslave_o_spike on April 18th, 2006 07:11 pm (UTC)
She definitely WILL NOT be putting it on the internet - that I can promise you.

I am encouraging her actually and I've been pointing out where her mistakes are (not just with grammar but with the flow of the story). She's actually taking my advice. Also the fact that she deems me worthy to read her fic is a BIG plus. It's almost as if the story is her own personal diary.
midnight: pretty jamesinkingwords on April 19th, 2006 06:21 am (UTC)
Congrats cause she's writing. Maybe make suggestions to her? Xanith?

What kind of restaurant do you have/
Maria: cuminslave_o_spike on April 19th, 2006 03:00 pm (UTC)
As I said to azure above, she's really not that bad. Xanith is a series of books by Piers Anthony - its a fantasy series. He has an excellent grasp of the English language and uses puns on the words. Xanith is on earth - its hard to explain - but it's like the magical world where Hogwarts is located. It's in a different realm. If my daughter were to explain Xanith, she would be talking to you for hours (literally!). She got into the books at 12 years old. She can't put them down. Mainly college kids read them.

My restaurant is a little fast food restauarant (cheeseburgers, fries and shakes) but not a franchise (our town is too small for a franchise because of the zoning capabilities). The town is lived in by people who were around during the days of yore when nothing but logging was going on. It's also lived in by Boeing employees and now more recently, Microsoft execs and their $$$million+ homes. Our place is really cute and we have a sign out front that reads "We specialize in grease, salt, sugar and caffiene."
midnightinkingwords on April 20th, 2006 02:35 am (UTC)
Adoring the sign!!
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Maria: mad about youslave_o_spike on April 19th, 2006 03:05 pm (UTC)
She actually DOES listen. The funny thing is I must have done something right because both of my oldest girls actually do listen to me. I told her how in her second chapter, she goes on and on about how they acquire everything to the point of tedium and yet she sort of skips through her explanation of where all the dangerous things are. She started laughing and said I was right. (I have to add humor in everytime I give them advice so they'll pay attention).
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Mariaslave_o_spike on April 19th, 2006 10:13 pm (UTC)
Yeah I have to be careful not to cross over lines when being snarky.

I just received the email and went over it. I can't believe I put in that many semicolons! OMG! How did I miss them? I think if I ever post that story to bjfic.net, I'll do the corrections per your beta. That's IF I do - the story might be too snarky for some BJ fans. Thank you for the betaing (how did Jason ever miss all that!?) And as for the "George" faux pas, I can't believe I missed that one. I had changed his name from George to Bart mid-way through and must have missed that one. *facepalm*

And yeah, I needed to exorcise all my demons regarding certain fanfic and Cowlip (actually I didn't mean to make fun of B/J but some of the stuff on the show had me saying "Do they actually expect us to buy that?!") I felt Cowlip gipped us in the 4th and 5th Season and I had to get that off my chest. Brian and Justin are still my first love, I just wished that they had stuck with the formula that worked.

And I'm glad you highlighted the stuff you liked, those were some of my favorite parts too! Thanks again Brie!